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    Critique my opener from this profile off match

    Here's the profile:

    In three words I would describe myself as determined, open-minded, and sarcastic. I graduated with my masters in counseling, and wanted to be a marriage family therapist. But life does not always take you where you planned.

    I was working at a non-profit agency for foster children for a few years and now just got a job working for the county. I'm currently working as a County Social Worker for Children's Services. My job can be very stressful at times, so if you wanted to give me a massage, I won't refuse .

    I'm really driven and career oriented, but also have a good balance of having fun. I love watching movies, and going dancing with my friends. I'm pretty active, I like to be outside on a beautiful day and go running, or ride my bike.

    I'm looking for someone that will make me laugh, but who can also hold an intelligent conversation. I want someone who can be adventurous and go on little weekend trips sometimes. I'm looking for someone who has goals and is ambitious.

    I don't want someone who is looking to play games or is overly confident. I need someone who is outgoing, mature, and knows how to treat a lady. If you can cook that's a plus. I want someone who is creative and is romantic. I'm looking for someone that would enjoy spending a lot of time together.

    Please don't write me if your just looking for sex.
    And here's my opener:

    Subject: So you have a stressful job too, huh?

    I deal with a lot of family issues in my job as well, so I know what you mean. Oh, and it's too bad you don't like to play games... because I kill at scrabble It's nice to see that you're looking for a guy who can cook, but the question is, can you?

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    With the first line, I'm trying to build some rapport with her, and I'm also being vague as to what my job is so I can bait her into asking me about it. Then, I used some cocky and funny on her "playing games" line. Finally, I asked a qualification question in my closing. What do you guys think?



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    Quote Originally Posted by Timecop View Post
    Here's the profile:



    And here's my opener:

    Subject: So you have a stressful job too, huh?

    I deal with a lot of family issues in my job as well, so I know what you mean. Oh, and it's too bad you don't like to play games... because I kill at scrabble It's nice to see that you're looking for a guy who can cook, but the question is, can you?

    ---

    With the first line, I'm trying to build some rapport with her, and I'm also being vague as to what my job is so I can bait her into asking me about it. Then, I used some cocky and funny on her "playing games" line. Finally, I asked a qualification question in my closing. What do you guys think?


    Honestly, her profile is boring.

    Rapport building is fine, but you shouldn't try to relate to her work if it's "stressful". She'll associate the "stress" with you and not respond/blow you off. Rapport with what she likes to do for fun, etc...


    "It's nice to see that you're looking for a guy who can cook, but the question is, can you?"

    I don't get it.

    Can she what?


    IMO, it's a boring profile, and your response was very stiff/awkward.


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    Yeah, her profile is really generic and can be pretty much applied to any girl. I had a tough time extracting things from it to use in my opener because everything in it is so boring.

    What I was getting at with the qualification question was can she cook.

    How is this:

    Subject: It's too bad you don't like to play games...

    Because I kill at scrabble You love watching movies, huh? What are some of your favorites? And don't say Pretty Woman. Oh, and it's nice to see that you're looking for a guy who can cook, but the question is, can you cook?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Timecop View Post
    Yeah, her profile is really generic and can be pretty much applied to any girl. I had a tough time extracting things from it to use in my opener because everything in it is so boring.

    What I was getting at with the qualification question was can she cook.

    How is this:

    Subject: It's too bad you don't like to play games...

    Because I kill at scrabble You love watching movies, huh? What are some of your favorites? And don't say Pretty Woman. Oh, and it's nice to see that you're looking for a guy who can cook, but the question is, can you cook?
    Gotcha.

    I'd move onto someone more exciting. She has a boring profile, therefore you're responses TO HER PROFILE will also be boring.
    I'm not digging it.

    If she had a much more lively profile, then it would be on!


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