Texting Feedback

[tyron]

I wanted to get some feedback on some texts. I don't think I did so well and wanted to know where I could've improved.

Me: The funniest thing happend at the gym today. I met a girl a girl that looks just like you! Looks like I found my Toronto-HB .. lol.
HB: Lol. Looks like you won't be needing me anymore. Well, it's been a slice.

Since she took close to 3 hours to respond to my initial text, I waited to respond but she couldn't wait for mine. She's also out of town for a few days.

HB: What you forgot about me already? I'm so horney I can't wait to get back. Unless the new girl is better than me? Is she?
Me: And here I thought ur breaking up with me over text. Almost as ruthless as your some of your ancestors .. lol. There can only be one girl for me.

We talked about her ancestors being conquerors in a previuos conversation a few days earlier.

HB: Ur so sweet. Was it ur plan to make me jealous of this new girl? I didn't like it. I was mad . U better be sorry for that. Cheers!
Me: I'll make it up to you next time I see you. A wanna-be HB can never measure up to the real one.
HB: No one can measure up to me. You better believe it. You owe me lots now. How dare you? Be afraid, be very afraid.
Me: All this texting is making me horny. Hurry back.
HB: I will. C u soon.

I think I wussed out by any feedback would be great. I didn't intend to make her jealous but I'm not sure what a good response would have been to that.

Tyron

[spyderone]

Yeah, I think you went a little easy at the end, but still I think it was a pretty good text convo. Nice one.

[tyron]

Any suggestions on where I could've done things different? I'm always looking to improve my text game.

[TyeJae]

DLV's everywhere in that convo coming from you. She was running the game and you were jumping through all her hoops without makin her jump through yours. Gotta make these ladies jump through your hoops.

Now I'm not saying I know exactly what to say. Just seems to me that the convorsation started out ok, but at the drop of "horny" from her, your TMM training was lost : ). However, you still got the girl right? : )~

[kink]

I'll help try to break some of this down for you...

Originally Posted by tyron

Me: The funniest thing happend at the gym today. I met a girl a girl that looks just like you! Looks like I found my Toronto-HB .. lol.

Meh. It opened, like it was supposed to.... "I found my *new*TdotHB"

Originally Posted by tyron

HB: Lol. Looks like you won't be needing me anymore. Well, it's been a slice.

Since she took close to 3 hours to respond to my initial text, I waited to respond but she couldn't wait for mine. She's also out of town for a few days.

Nothing lost, i guess? Could have played her off by saying something like, "No baby! I totally still need you, to cook me dinner and clean up my place" or something to that effect. Something really sexist. Remember, stereotypes are funny.

Originally Posted by tyron

HB: What you forgot about me already? I'm so horney I can't wait to get back. Unless the new girl is better than me? Is she?

Heres her fist major, blatant hoop. Is she better than me. Probably would have been best to ignore it and go off her horny comment. "Horny eh? Ya, I have that effect on women.. what are you going to do to me when you get back? "

Originally Posted by tyron

Me: And here I thought ur breaking up with me over text. Almost as ruthless as your some of your ancestors .. lol. There can only be one girl for me.

Two half fails. The breaking up part comes across as needy a bit. The ancestors gag was good. The one girl for me just shifted the convo to her court. "There can only be one girl for me..." I don't even know how to finish that sentence in better standing. ".. my mom!" "..your mom!" that only gets back so far. Commander Zap (?who) told this to TD:

"Remember TD, don't write what you can say, don't say what you can wink, don't wink what you can smile."

Try to keep the meaning shorter.

Originally Posted by tyron

HB: Ur so sweet. Was it ur plan to make me jealous of this new girl? I didn't like it. I was mad . U better be sorry for that. Cheers!

Holy crap shes laying it on thick. And...

Originally Posted by tyron

Me: I'll make it up to you next time I see you. A wanna-be HB can never measure up to the real one.

You failed there. I'll make it up to you??? What do you have to make up? Just cause she 'said' she was mad, doesn't EVER mean you have to apoligize. If you actually fucked up, and you personally feel bad, then apoligize. She was jealous and upset from her own insecurities.

"Not sorry, just busy with my new gym buddy... haha, I'll talk to you later "

Originally Posted by tyron

HB: No one can measure up to me. You better believe it. You owe me lots now. How dare you? Be afraid, be very afraid.

Straight up whoregirl mode. You give them an inch...

Originally Posted by tyron

Me: All this texting is making me horny. Hurry back.
HB: I will. C u soon.

You come off as really needy and outcome dependant. You need her to come back just to satisfy your sexualy urge. That means you don't have other women in your life to satisfy it for you, therefor giving her reign over that domain in your life.

I find texting really easy to throw out some cocky ass shit.. read this:

Text Game Basics by Braddock and Savoy

it might help ya out, I don't think I've read all of it but there are useful bits and pieces.

Have fun, let us know how the rest of it goes.

[spyderone]

Kink totally nailed it!

[chill84]

I cringed just reading that convo, fortunately Kink explains it really well for you.

[tyron]

Thanks for the feedback Kink and everyone else. I'm still new at this but this really helps.

Tyron

[tyron]

Just an update. I got the following texts and hope I've improved in my responses:

HB: Hey hey. Guess who's back in town. I'll give you a hint. She's a princess.
Me: I hope this princess knows how to vacuum and clean dishes because my place is a mess.
HB: Lol. I don't do that sort of stuff mister but I can point out if you've missed a spot. So are you going to call me tonight or what??
Me: Call? You'll have to ask my mom if I can call. She said to stay away from girls like you .. lol.

That was it. Also, whenever we do talk she says 'call me tomorrow' or 'call me later' and stuff like that. What should I say to stuff like that? I think who calls who is kinda petty but I know she's doing that to maintain some sort of control.

Tyron

[kink]

Originally Posted by tyron

HB: Hey hey. Guess who's back in town. I'll give you a hint. She's a princess.
Me: I hope this princess knows how to vacuum and clean dishes because my place is a mess.
HB: Lol. I don't do that sort of stuff mister but I can point out if you've missed a spot. So are you going to call me tonight or what??
Me: Call? You'll have to ask my mom if I can call. She said to stay away from girls like you .. lol.

WAY better. Still some things to improve on, however, but much better.

Could have improved like:

"I hope this is the princess who knows how..." its a very slight change, but shows that there are other 'princesses' in your life.
OR
"Oh! Princess (insert famous princess?) is in town?? I've been meaning to call her back forev... oh, you mean you? haha :P"

The last reply was sorta weak, I hope you did call her though. Throw her off by saying no, and then do it. Just on your schedule.

Originally Posted by tyron

Also, whenever we do talk she says 'call me tomorrow' or 'call me later' and stuff like that. What should I say to stuff like that?

I just totally destroy the moment.

A simple "Nah, dont think so", "No thanks", "Yaaaaa maybe..." will always work. Make sure you're saying it jokingly, with a laugh or a wink or something. Then proceed to phone whenever YOU have free time or feel like talking.