Critique my game

[flyboy352]

Ok, so some of you might have read my thread about the opener that I posted up. Basically here is one of the transactions I got from that opener and I’m curious what critiques anyone can give me. HB’s answers are in blue, mine are in red comments are in black. Read from the top down.

I know we havent met but I think we should stop seeing each other :P

Easy enough.

At this point I didn’t respond, forgot about her and moved on. The first two messages were on August 8th, she didn’t respond with whats below until the 15th

Alright, I'm a curious person. Any particular reason why you felt like sharing that with me? Nice music by the way.

haha, thanks, I still need to work on that play list as its nowhere near done. Anyway, do you want the honest answer or the funny haha bs answer? Lol

Hmm, both?

Hmm, nah you can only have one...
Well, ok fine, but just this once.
Funny haha: I just couldnt take it anymore. All the fighting, its like I dont even know you! Now we dont even talk, so I dont even know the point anymore .
Truth: I was sitting here at work, not feeling very productive, decided to send a random message to a random person (yeah thats the boring side lol)

1) But baby, you know I wouldn't fight with you if I didn't care. I know we've gone through some hard times, but we've had more good times than bad. Why would you want to throw that all away? You drive me crazy, but I love you for it baby.
2) Yes, the first was better. It does prove though, you have great taste in random people to message on myspace. I'm awesome. So .. go you. Something else you know you're good at.

IOI and qualifying herself already?

1) I know I know....Im sorry, I take it back. I just get crazy sometimes and dont know what Im talking about .
2) Well you do get points for creativity on that first one haha. Your awesome huh? Hmm, lets test that. I was reading this in a girlie magazine, would u rather:
Live in a mansion on the lake or a shack on the beach
have to always say whats on ur mind or only speak pig latin
have a year of toe curling sex and a year of no sex or two years of so so sex

Wow ... a guy using a girlie magazine to test my awesomeness. Is that your standard scale of measurement? Odd, but I'm down.
Shack on the beach. I love surfing.
Always speak my mind. I confuse people enough without throwing pig latin into the mix.
A year of toe-curling sex followed and a year of no sex. If it's not passionate, why do it?
I only have one question for you. Answer honestly. Are you a zombie, or a robot?

Ok, now Im interested, I like her responses

Well I have to know what days of the week I can wear which dresses :P. Plus, I always get a kick out of "how to please your man" articles lol.
Zombie or robot? Im a total freakin vegetarian zombie! 100% all the way! Why vegetarian you ask? Well, have you seen most the people here in the US? I mean...Im not big on fatty meats ya know...so I chose to eat the veggies or the occasional personal trainer I come across (Im not strict on my veggy lifestyle). But to keep myself satisfied between flesh meals...I just nibble a little on people lol.
Ok, that was definitely one of the most original questions Ive ever been asked, good job. Why have I not received a friends request yet? HMMM?

Yeah I messed up on this one, I probably shouldn’t have even answered the question and just reframed her. As far as the “why have I not received a friends request” line…I don’t like it (although it worked) it sounds too needy…Ive sense reworked the line to something like “I just noticed we have been having all this fun and you haven’t sent me a friends request…its ok, don’t be shy, I don’t bite….”
The last message was sent at 9:00AM on the 15th…I didn’t hear back from her tell 7:40AM the next day


My weekend has been off to a great start! I have this long-standing blood fued with my friend's parrot. First time I met the guy he walked up to me as if to say, "Hey, how's it going?" I was all, "Cool, look at the friendly parrot".
Then the little jerk bit my foot. Since then it's been on. I can't count how many times he's gone after me.
Last night I was saying goodbye to my friends when this bird crash-lands into my head. I'k trying to head-bang it off but it won't let go. I try grabbing the stupid space chicken, without hurting it, and the thing tears into my hand. I think it now has a taste for human flesh. So, my question to you, who is your mortal enemy right now, and why?

I didn’t fall for the question this time

Wow, alright...I tell you what. Youve peaked my interest lol. You seem like you might be somewhat enjoyable to be around lol. Maybe if you can come up with another good story like that one, I will call you when you give me your number. :P

So she read it but never responded. I figured, oh well it was fun. Then I get a message at 12:40AM today:

So I thought I sent you a message around 7 AM with this awesome story. It was 6 paragraphs long and all about why I own this plastic green bowler hat because of The Bible. Really good story, by the way.
For whatever reason, looks like it never got sent. If you did get it, cool, if not, you should call me and I'll just tell you the story.555-1234

haha, no I didnt get it...darn it sounds like a good one. I tell you what though, I will give you a call so you sit eagerly by your phone waiting for a number to call you. It starts with 9 and ends with 9 ok? lol Now you better not step away from your phone or you might miss it!

Sorry for the long ass post, I was trying to make the transaction as readable as possible. Critique my game guys, what should I have done different or what would you have done different?